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You have recently moved to a new house. Write a letter to your english-speaking friend, explain why you moved, describe the new house, invite him/her to visit

#house #friend #visit
Dear Anna, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I’m so glad to tell you that I moved to a townhouse
last
 week and the
house
I
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was so satisfying. I was so satisfied with the
house
 Actually, my parents will come next week and stay for half a year. As you know, my previous flat is too small for us to stay.
That is
 the main reason I would like to move.
While
,
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 it is very hard to find a suitable
house
 in London. And I was so lucky to find an excellent agent company and they helped me to rent
this
 townhouse
in
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at
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 a reasonable price. The
house
 is perfect. We have two bedrooms with
suite
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a suite
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 and one study, and the electronic equipment
such
 as dishwashers, fridge, and air conditioners are brand new
, .
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,
.
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Also
, to my
surprice
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surprise
, I have a big yard where I can do some gardening. So I’m so satisfied/
pleasant
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 with my new home. I suppose that we could meet each other in my new home and we can
chatting
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chat
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, cooking and watching chat, cook and watch the latest movies. How about
this
 weekend? I am so missing you. Look forward to your reply! Best Wishes, Rebecca
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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