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You have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: explain the situation describe why it bothers you suggest a solution

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Dear Sir, I am Mangesh. living in your rented house for the past few years. I am writing to express my annoyance with the new neighbour who shifted recently to the apartment which you have rented to them. His is name John. We have met a few times. Though he is a student, his late-night party disturbs my sleep,
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 he litters the floor with his garbage
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 he plays loud music in the evening
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 smokes in the room which is not allowed, as told by you and he throws the cigarette buds near the window which makes the building ground dirty and it smell's a lot, many children play near the ground, which is will give them a negative effect on their life. Henceforth I would like you to take action against
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 kind of behaviour and give him possible solutions for the do's and don't. I would like you to tell him to behave properly. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mangesh
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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