The table below compares the income of secondary and high school teachers in five particular countries : Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

The table below compares the income of secondary and high school teachers in five particular countries : Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
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The table below compares the
income
of secondary and high school
teachers
in five particular countries :
Australia
,
Denmark
,
Luxembourg
,
Japan
and
Korea
in 2009.
Overall
, the
salary
rate
in these five nations observed an upward trend over the period of 15
years
.
While
Luxembourg
teachers
earned the highest
income
,
this
figure for
Australia
accounted for the lowest number. In the starting stage,
teachers
from
Australia
and
Denmark
were paid 28,000 and 45,000 respectively. After 15-year experience, Australian lecturers could achieve the maximum
salary
rate
(48,000) and took nine
years
to reach the top
salary
. Meanwhile, the
income
of
Denmark
teachers
began at 45,000 and increased steadily by 9,000 in the next 15
years
. Eight
years
are adequate for
teachers
from
Denmark
to get the top
salary
. The
salary
rate
of
teachers
from
Luxembourg
started at 80,000 followed by two countries from Asia :
Japan
and
Korea
, at 34,000 and 30,000 respectively. After 15
years
,
teachers
'
income
in
Luxembourg
increased sharply to 119,000 and
this
figure for
Japan
and
Korea
also
witnessed a rapid growth of 31,000 and 18,000 respectively.
While
Australia
and
Denmark
took less than 10
years
to reach the top
salary
, these three countries spent more than 30
years
to achieve the top
rate
(
Luxembourg
with 30
years
,
Japan
with 37
years
and
Korea
with 34
years
).
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