.In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

Undoubtedly,in some
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of the world,
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target is
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to
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.
However
,some
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provide
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range of
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can master
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general
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necessary
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us because
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can improve our view,
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because
it
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can help us to take up a job easily but
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them in university would be better. On the one hand,It is difficult to
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direction because it
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widely
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knowledge,and it
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importance
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of general
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.
In other words
,learning general
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school
is a good way for us to try different
subjects
and
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which is
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our own
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favourite subject.
For example
,research supposed general
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courses.
Additionally
,general
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can help us to understand the whole world
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as geography help us to learn where did you live,and historiography
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a lot of
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happened in past.
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,specific
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also
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necessary for
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because
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would prefer to engage
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students
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who have a specific skill,and
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higher
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salary.
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would not engage any employee
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haven’t relevant specific knowledge.
Besides
that,specific
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focus
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specific
area
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and have
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chance to get
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achievement
. In conclusion,general
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must
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to
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students
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because it can let
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understand
whole
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world and make their own future plan.
While
specific
education
is
also
important because it
make
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sure
student
can
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a higher
life
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standard in future.In my view,I think both are important we need to balance
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and don’t just focus
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one way.
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