The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
The table illustrates secondary and high school
teachers
’ earnings in Australia,
Denmark
,
Luxembourg
, Japan and Korea in 2009.
Overall
,
while
teachers
in
Luxembourg
were the most well-paid,
teachers
from Australia were the lowest-paid.
In addition
, the amount of time it took for a teacher in
Denmark
to earn the maximum salary was much faster than
most
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in most
show examples
other countries. The amount of pay
that Secondary and High school
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that Secondary and High school teacher
those Secondary and High school teachers
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teachers
in
Luxembourg
were paid started at $80,000 a year,
while
the figure for
teachers
in
Denmark
was significantly lower, at $45,000.
Besides
, the salary of
teachers
in the remaining 3 countries started at around $30,000.
However
,
teachers
who worked at least 15
years
in
Luxembourg
earned up to $119,000 a year,
while
teachers
in
Denmark
and Japan with the same
years
of experience only made salaries of $54,000 and $65,000 respectively. Meanwhile, Australian and Korean
teachers
with at least 15
years
experience
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of experience
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were paid the lowest salaries, at $48,000 a year. It is
also
obvious that it only took
teachers
in Australia and
Denmark
less than 10
years
to receive their maximum salary,
while
teachers
in the other countries had to work for at least 30
years
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words denmark, luxembourg, teachers, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary school
  • high school
  • earnings
  • salaries
  • cost of living
  • demand
  • governmental budgets
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • economic health
  • quality of education
  • retention rates
  • social recognition
  • professional status
  • financial stability
  • performance
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