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The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
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The table illustrates secondary and high school
teachers
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’ earnings in Australia,
Denmark
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,
Luxembourg
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, Japan and Korea in 2009.
Overall
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,
while
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teachers
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 in
Luxembourg
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 were the most well-paid,
teachers
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 from Australia were the lowest-paid.
In addition
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, the amount of time it took for a teacher in
Denmark
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 to earn the maximum salary was much faster than
most
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in most
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 other countries. The amount of pay
that Secondary and High school
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that Secondary and High school teacher
those Secondary and High school teachers
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teachers
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 in
Luxembourg
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 were paid started at $80,000 a year,
while
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 the figure for
teachers
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 in
Denmark
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 was significantly lower, at $45,000.
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, the salary of
teachers
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 in the remaining 3 countries started at around $30,000.
However
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,
teachers
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 who worked at least 15
years
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 in
Luxembourg
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 earned up to $119,000 a year,
while
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teachers
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 in
Denmark
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 and Japan with the same
years
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 of experience only made salaries of $54,000 and $65,000 respectively. Meanwhile, Australian and Korean
teachers
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 with at least 15
years
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experience
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of experience
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 were paid the lowest salaries, at $48,000 a year. It is
also
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 obvious that it only took
teachers
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 in Australia and
Denmark
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 less than 10
years
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 to receive their maximum salary,
while
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teachers
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 in the other countries had to work for at least 30
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words denmark, luxembourg, teachers, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondary school
  • high school
  • earnings
  • salaries
  • cost of living
  • demand
  • governmental budgets
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • economic health
  • quality of education
  • retention rates
  • social recognition
  • professional status
  • financial stability
  • performance
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