The table illustrates secondary and high school teachers’ earnings in Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
The table illustrates secondary and high school
teachers
’ earnings in Australia, Denmark
, Luxembourg
, Japan and Korea in 2009.
Overall
, while
teachers
in Luxembourg
were the most well-paid, teachers
from Australia were the lowest-paid. In addition
, the amount of time it took for a teacher in Denmark
to earn the maximum salary was much faster than most
other countries.
The amount of pay Change preposition
in most
that Secondary and High school
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that Secondary and High school teacher
those Secondary and High school teachers
teachers
in Luxembourg
were paid started at $80,000 a year, while
the figure for teachers
in Denmark
was significantly lower, at $45,000. Besides
, the salary of teachers
in the remaining 3 countries started at around $30,000.
However
, teachers
who worked at least 15 years
in Luxembourg
earned up to $119,000 a year, while
teachers
in Denmark
and Japan with the same years
of experience only made salaries of $54,000 and $65,000 respectively. Meanwhile, Australian and Korean teachers
with at least 15 years
experience
were paid the lowest salaries, at $48,000 a year. It is Change preposition
of experience
also
obvious that it only took teachers
in Australia and Denmark
less than 10 years
to receive their maximum salary, while
teachers
in the other countries had to work for at least 30 years
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