Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Though some people think that giving more time

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sentences is the best way to make less

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, others consider something subsidies are better ways to reduce crimes. I think the way to reduce

crime

is different for different types of

criminals

, so the way to reduce

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is not the same for different

criminals

. For some bad

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longer prison sentences help to restain their

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. Some

criminals

have made serious mistakes, if you do not give them longer

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person

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, they may do

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in prison in front of inmates to get everyone's trust but when they get out they do bad things again.

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is not a good thing. Because letting them out would still do a certain amount of harm to

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society

. So the time can be adjusted

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criminals

. For some other

criminals

, some better alternative ways are more suitable for them.

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cases that are not so serious can

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them to do

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that will help others may be a better choice, the

criminals

will learn some special skills and these

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will change their minds. These actions like accumulating

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good deeds will be good for those

criminals

when they get out in the future. So, maybe there

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some better alternative ways to

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crimes. Generally, the right approach to different

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2Word repetition
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9 paragraphs

237 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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