Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Though some people think that giving more time

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sentences is the best way to make less

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, others consider something subsidies are better ways to reduce crimes. I think the way to reduce

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longer prison sentences help to restain their

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have made serious mistakes, if you do not give them longer

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in prison in front of inmates to get everyone's trust but when they get out they do bad things again.

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that will help others may be a better choice, the

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

237 words

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