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There is a strong view that training of work is more important than broad education. To what extent you agree with this?

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On-the-
job
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 training and courses have become increasingly popular nowadays.
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 some occupations require a certain level of higher
education
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 degrees, some
people
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 believe that work-specific training is essential. I partly agree that some jobs necessitate a certain level of
education
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 prior to the hiring process and that
this
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 can vary depending on the profession and area. Training on the
job
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 and continuous professional development have been widely incorporated in various
job
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 sectors which gives flexibility to many
people
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 to learn and earn a living simultaneously.
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 is because it provides opportunities for individuals who have not had a higher
education
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 certificate to learn different skills, climb the career ladder and
also
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 get decent pay in return.
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, some administrative jobs require a certain awareness of computer skills for which employers offer specialized courses for candidates to learn and upgrade their knowledge every certain amount of months to stay up-to-date.
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this
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 can be significantly expensive for employers, it can be a great incentive for
people
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 to learn and get paid for the
job
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. Some
job
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 sectors have a strict higher
education
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 certificate policy.
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, a certain level of learning might be needed prior to starting certain jobs as these occupations can be wide and a certain type of knowledge can be crucial for various reasons.
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, medicine can be extremely demanding and to work as a doctor, it is important to complete over four years of learning before commencing the
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.
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, not having a degree before starting professionally does not necessarily mean that a person cannot learn whilst working.
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, I believe
this
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 entirely depends on the
job
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 sector involved. In conclusion, the world is constantly changing and the need for staff across multiple areas is consistently rising even though some individuals find it more convenient to earn a living
while
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 learning, it is still essential for different sectors to have a degree requirement rather than to learn on the
job
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. But, looking at the
last
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 decade and to fill in the gaps in employment, would the governments implement initiatives in the future to allow
people
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 to earn higher degrees
while
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 working?
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