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The government should encourage industries and business to move out of big cities and into regional areas. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Nowadays, big
cities
 are becoming more crowded and polluted. The government should help
industries
 to transfer their factories into regional areas.
This
 change would probably produce positive and negative effects. In
this
 essay, I will enunciate them and explain my own opinion.
Firstly
, moving
industries
 and businesses outside big
cities
 allow for an increase in the quality of the air in these towns. As a matter of fact, one of the worst problems of living in big
cities
 among others is often air pollution.
For example
, by reducing the number of
industries
 in these areas people would probably decide to live inside the city, and what is more, fewer people would have to cross the town to reach their
job
 with the result of less traffic inside the city.
On the other hand
,
this
 phenomenon could have some disadvantages
such
 as more stress for workers who live far away from their
job
. In fact, during the
last
 decades, a lot of people moved from the regional areas to big
cities
 to stay closer to their
job
.
For instance
,
this
 change would probably force workers who live in the city to spend more hours commuting every day causing them an increase in the level of stress.
To sum up
, the government should encourage
this
 change taking care of the disadvantages that it could create. In my opinion, helping workers to reach their
job
 with common transport or providing them with new houses and moving
industries
 and businesses outside big
cities
 could produce a better quality of air inside
cities
 reducing traffic and the density of the population
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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