Doctors in many countries say that people do not do enough physical exercises. What are the causes of this trend? How can the situation be improved?

During the 19th century, a man had to go outside and work hard to provide a fair
amount
of food for his family. Even, his family members supported him by planting crops in their backyard. But, the inventions in the latter part of the century changed
this
to
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trend, where the
amount
of physical work
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. People started to use their
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which yielded the necessary things for them without much effort. Adding to
this
, the evolution of technology provided more desk jobs, which decreased the
amount
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of physical activities done in a
day
.
This
trend has grown year-by-year and nowadays we are able to shop
anything
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online and get delivered
at
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our doorstep. The onset of pandemic diseases is
also
a factor in the increase
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online shopping. The increase in the number of online games and social media, made us fixated
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our
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. All of these factors
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kept humans inside their doors, which lead to
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decrease in the
amount
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of physical activities we did.
This
change did not happen in a single
day
, and in order to mitigate
this
, we have to make more efforts. We can follow a daily routine of going for
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exercise in the morning, and
also
we can use stairs
instead
of escalators, whenever possible. We can
also
avoid spending more time
infront
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in front
of screens and go out for a small game in
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lesiure
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leisure
time. Government can create
the
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awareness of physical activities
over
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the media. They can
also
conduct marathons and various
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events to indulge more people in exercising. Rome was not built in a
day
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, to increase the
amount
of exercise we do in a
day
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • physical inactivity
  • busy and stressful
  • work schedules
  • lack of motivation
  • technological advancements
  • unhealthy habits
  • insufficient awareness
  • benefits of exercise
  • sedentary behavior
  • health risks
  • sedentary jobs
  • physical fitness
  • physical well-being
  • regular exercise
  • physical activity
  • health professionals
  • public awareness campaigns
  • exercise routines
  • fitness facilities
  • personal trainers
  • health benefits
  • weight management
  • stress reduction
  • improved cardiovascular health
  • increased energy levels
  • enhanced mood
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