Studies show that many criminals do not receive enough education. For this reason, some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate them rather than punish them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

These days, serious crimes rising in our society is a serious issue. The
criminal
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rates are increasing
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its
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fastest speed ever. Based on the studies, it is controversial that the best way to prevent crime is to provide
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than just punishment. Personally, I believe in the idea that
people
can change by
education
. On the one hand,
education
is a crucial factor that affects
people
both physically and psychologically.
People
who received
education
from their childhood are significantly different from those who didn't
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any
education
.
Educations
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starts from admitting that I am different from others. Our point of view can change by accepting
this
single fact. Even
criminals
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are unforgivable, we can provide them at least a chance to realize that they are different from ordinary
people
.
On the other hand
, there are some cases criminals repeat the same crime again after
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education
or punishment. Some
people
who disagree
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education
is
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focusing on
this
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cases. Even
we
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provide a chance for them, crime rates are never reduced.
However
, to change something in a positive way, we should focus on the good parts rather than focusing on the bad parts. In conclusion, to decrease the growing
criminal
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rate, it is important to utilize the power of
education
.
According to
Bendam
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Bentham
, the philosopher, sometimes
soft
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way is stronger than simple punishments.
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