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Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources ad money so computers should replace them.however others do not agree .Discuss both sides and give our opinion

#people #libraries #waste #resources #ad #money #computers
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It is suggested that with technological advancement libraries are no more needed, all necessary
information
 could be found
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Internet
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Nevertheless
, some people have the opposite view, they feel that books can't be replaced with computers. In
this
 essay, I will overview both opinions and give my own
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the
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conclusion. Nowadays we can find a lot of different
information
 online,
according to
 persons needs. It can be love stories, scientific articles, fairytales or educational literature. If two or three decades before it was needed to buy a book or search in libraries, today it could be done from home, all we need now is access to the
Internet
. Undoubtedly, there are a lot of advantages of
these trend
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Firstly
, it saves time, which is important in today's busy life.
Secondly
, it is easier to find
information
 in
computer
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the computer
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.
For example
, searching
information
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 in books , it is necessary to read through a lot of literature, but
in
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Internet
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 everything you need is to write
key words
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 in
"search"
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 bar.
On the other hand
, there are
a
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plenty of disadvantages . Unfortunately, not all of the
information
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are
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 true.
For instance
 , writing a study it will be a challenge to find scientifically
proved
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 facts.
Also
, some people prefer to read books and it is difficult for them to read on the computer, especially for individuals over 60 years old.
Furthermore
, spending a long time in front of the PC may cause important medical issues. In conclusion, my opinion is that invention of the computers made our lives
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easier , but there are some factors why libraries should exist.
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