The government investments in art ,music and theatre is a waste of money . Government should invest these funds in public services instead . What extent do you agree or disagree .

There is no doubt that these days
government
spend their funds on
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wasteless things like art exhibitions , music and theatre
that
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is why often people argued that authorities must
used
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that
money
on different sectors like health care , education and many other public work . Personally ,I agree with
this
statement and in
this
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I will briefly explain it . To commence with the first
viewpoints
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that why
government
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the government
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have
not
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consume their
money
on enjoyment resources
this
is because nowadays
number
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the number
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of problems are at an
alaming
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alarming
rate . Needless to, say lawmakers should take care
about
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the
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health services as
majority
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of people are
died
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due to
high
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cost of private
hostipal
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hospital
hospitals
.
For example
in my nation private hospitals are not come under every class
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hence
some are unable to take proper treatment ,
at
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and at
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leat
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least
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they died
while
fighting with their
diseas
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diseases
.
Therefore
,
country
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the country
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owner
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owners
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have to invest their
money
on
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the
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public health to save their
citizen
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citizens
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lifes
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lives
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. Probing
further
, there
are
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is
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environment
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problem like pollution and transport system
isses
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issues
,first and foremost , authorities ought to do
investment
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on
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solving global warming since personal vehicles are rising in
the
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society which directly
harm
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the
ozen
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ozone
layer and finish the natural resources because fuel
are
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made
uo
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up
of coal and other natural material . To reduce
this
government
have to increase the
prise
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price
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of fuel , and avoid
to give
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giving
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any
vehilces
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vehicles
on
the
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installment
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.
Moreover
, they have to
enought
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enough
the people to used
goverment
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government
transport ,
thus
this
can
also
reduce the traffic
conjustion
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congestion
,save
atomsphere
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atmosphere
, and natural products as well . In conclusion ,
althought
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although
government
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waste tax on useless task
nonetheless
I think
government
can still save their
money
and invest
on
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the
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usefull
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useful
things like they can handle their
country
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work by
this
.
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