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The chart below give information on the ages of populations of yamen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The chart below give information on the ages of populations of yamen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The pie charts depict
the
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information
regardingthe
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regarding the
 ages of the individuals of
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yemen
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Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.The data is calibrated in
percentage
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.
Overall
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,in 2000 in
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Yemen
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,Yemen
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 the number of
citizens
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 in the
age
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group
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 of 60
years
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 above had
minimum
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a minimum
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percentage
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whereas
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 in Italy in
15
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the 15
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-59
years
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age
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group
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 masses had
maximum
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a maximum
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percentage
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.In 2050,
Yemen
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 is expected of
minimum
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the minimum
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 population of 60
years
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 above
while
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 in Italy maximum
percentage
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 is projected in
15
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the 15
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-59
years
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age
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group
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. At a fleeting glance, in 2000 in
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Yemen
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,Yemen
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 the population was less of
15
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the 15
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-59
years
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age
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group
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 which was 46.3% as compared
Italy
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to Italy
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.In Italy,
number
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a number
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 of
citizens
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 is more in
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age
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the age
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group
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 of 60
years
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 above which was almost a quarter
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 to
Yemen
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 where
population
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the population
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low
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is low
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.
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,in
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Yemen
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,Yemen
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 50.1% of people were in
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age
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the age
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group
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 of 0-14
years
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.Interestingly,the
percentage
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 of
citizens
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 was decreased in
ltaly
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Italy
 by 35.8%. Probing ahead,in 2050 in
Yemen
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 large
group
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 of people is expected to present in
15
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the 15
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-59
years
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age
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group
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 which will be 57.3%
whereas
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this
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projected
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is projected
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 to decrease in
ltaly
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Italy
.
The
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 less proportion of masses is expected to present in the
age
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group
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 of 60
years
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above
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and above
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 in
Yemen
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.
In addition
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,the
citizens
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is
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 projected in small
percentage
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 in
ltaly
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Italy
 which was 11.5% as compared to
Yemen
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 which will be 37%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, percentage, citizens, age, group, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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