The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

The three pie charts show the changes in annual spending by a particular school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
The given pie charts provide information about the yearly expenditures of a UK school in three different years 1981,1991 and 2001.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
spendings
on salaries were the highest every year,
whereas
the
spendings
on insurance were the lowest.
According to
the graph,
this
school
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expenditures in 1981,1991 and 2001 in terms of wages of teachers were 40%, 50% and 45% respectively.
In addition
to
this
,
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the proportions
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proportions
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proportion
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of money spent on insurance didn't
exceeded
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10% in any year, reaching 8% in 2001.
Moreover
, the
expenditures
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expenditure
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on learning resources,
such
as dictionaries and books was 15% in 1981. After which, the figure peaked at 20% and dropped dramatically to 9% in 2001. Regarding annual
spendings
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spending
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on other
staffs'
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salaries, the figure decreased gradually over the period and plumbed in 2001 with 15%
money
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of money
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spent on
paychecks
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the paychecks
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of these people.
Furthermore
, the statistics of
spendings
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spending
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on both equipment and furniture fluctuated and reached 23% in 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words spendings with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual spending
  • budget allocation
  • educational expenses
  • financial distribution
  • percentage
  • increase/decrease in spending
  • significant change
  • expenditures
  • comparison
  • trend
  • category
  • shift
  • saw a rise/fall
  • investment
  • allocation
  • predominant
  • minor
  • resources
  • prioritize
  • fiscal policy
  • capital outlay
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