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The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.

The table below gives information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
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The given tabular chart represents the data about the issues which
children
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Overall
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, it can be seen that
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section
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 A faced more problems
that
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than
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section
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B
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 in both
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years . It can be noticed from the table that in 2005, the school-going
children
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 faced more obstacles in following instructions which
was
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 6% in
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B
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 ,
however
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 , it was 6
time
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 more in
section
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 less in
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While
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isses
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issues
 was in listening
skill
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 and verbal expression of
idea
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 which was 35% in
Section
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 A and less than 15% in
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section
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B
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moreover
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,
one third
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 problem was faced by
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the
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spelling in
section
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 A and 5% in
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B
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. In reading and
handing
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handling
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 the difference of 6% was
obseved
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observed
 in
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 A wheres approximately
same
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the same
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 in
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B
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 which was less than 8%. Probing
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 , the
propertion
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proportion
 of 18% was seen in fosses in chapter and following instruction in 2015 in
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 A
whilest
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whilst
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, less than 15%
calcuate
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calculate
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B
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Likewise
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 in
section
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children
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 faced problem in listening and verbal express of idea ans 3% difference was noticed in
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B
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 in 2015.
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children
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near by
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quater
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quarter
 problem in reading ,
handing
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handling
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 and spelling in
section
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 A
whereas
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, section, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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