You should spend about 15 minutes on this task. There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the complaints that have been made say why the reception area is important suggest how the reception area could be improved

Dear Mr.Reynold,
This
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is Georgia Henry from
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the Finance
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Department, and today I have been writing to you regarding the complaints that we
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receiving for the past few months
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along
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with some suggestions to
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improve
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them.
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, visitors frequently complain about less space near the reception desk, and insufficient desks to perform paperwork. Nextly, the masses are not happy about the seating arrangements because there are only a few chairs for waiting.
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, we
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have only one person
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it is difficult to attend to
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people at a single time
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it
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their time
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also
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. Undoubtedly, the very first place that outsiders interact is the waiting area
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it should be calm, composed and beautifully designed. Since it is commonly believed that the first impression is a long-lasting one and it should be perfect. Needless to say,
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need to expand the reception area and redesign it to make it more comfortable. Obviously, there is a need to install new sofas, chairs, and tables so that individuals find it convenient to wait.
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, we should hire a new employee as well to attend to more customers for a
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. I really appreciate that you consider my viewpoint to address the issue
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I am hoping my suggestions
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assist you too. Your`s sincerely, Georgia Henry.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph covers one clear idea. Try to explain your suggestions in more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear connecting words to help the reader follow your points better. For example, use 'first', 'second', and 'finally'.
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Try to include more details about why the reception area matters. This will help the reader understand your points better.
coherence and cohesion
Check your letter structure, such as making sure your greeting is spaced correctly and that you sign off correctly.
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You have made a good effort to identify the problems with the reception area.
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Your tone is polite and suitable for a letter to a manager.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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