Some people believe that having sport in schools is a waste of time and resources, whilst other people believe that sport in schools is a vital part of education.

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Nowadays some
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people
think that having
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as a
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to study is a waste of money and time,
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others argue that
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plays a significant role in
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of pupils.
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agree with
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statement because
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subject
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helps
students
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to refresh their minds and do some physical activities.
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essay will discuss both statements and explain my opinion. First of all, it is
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fact that
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is one of the keys to
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a healthy lifestyle regardless of how old people are and has many other benefits. Not surprisingly, most
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schools
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the schools
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today have
PE
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as a
subject
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to make
students
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more forceful and increase their endurance as they are busy with studies and have no leisure time to do some
excersizes
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exercises
.
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during
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lection pupils can get unwind and refresh their heads after being concentrated on other
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lections.
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,
students
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can learn more about sports which gives them
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the opportunity
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to decide whether they will
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work in
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area or understand how important for their life doing some activities can be.
In addition
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, it
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is obvious that
sport
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is a
subject
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that teaches pupils discipline. On
other
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hand, having
PE
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in schools has disadvantages.
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, to purchase a uniform parents of children need to offer it, find a size that suits
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their children and
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spend
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them
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money or cancel their offer if their children would not like it. Despite
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, relying on some
graduaters
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graduates
graduate
having
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lection on
highter
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higher
grades makes some problems because
instead
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of preparing for their final exams they do
excersizes
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exercises
at
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wasting their free time. They believe that
sport
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is not as important as other lections and
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themselves why they must
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wear a special outfit as they do not do anything
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crucial
and they do not pass any exam or test on
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subject
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.
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, some
indivials
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individuals
are arguing about
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topic as they do not understand the role of
sport
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playing in their life. In conclusion,
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strongly believe that everyone in
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world should do some physical
activites
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activities
activity
whether where they are. I
also
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support that all
students
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should have
PE
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in their educational centre because it really benefits
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them, their education and their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Cognitive function
  • Teamwork
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Extracurricular
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  • Resource allocation
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