The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000- 2010.

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The line graph illustrates the annual income

statictics

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statistics

of three

breads

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bread

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shopes

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shoppes

shops

Calgery

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Calgary

during a decade.

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, the amount of Bolo and Amandine grew

continouesly

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continuously

while

the amount of revenue

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Mari's shop declined.

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these data,

regardes

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regardless

Mari

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income,

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was in the first stage in 2000

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above 80000 $ in the year . There was a significant rise in 2001 and 2004 and it stood at roughly 100000$.

Although

between 2001 and 2003 the amount of that

droped

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dropped

in the same revenue of 2000, there was a noticeable .

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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000- 2010.

ou have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter: Describe the problem the new employee has caused Explain how other employees about the new employee’s conduct Say how you expect the HR manager to address the situation.

In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school .What arre reasons and solution.

You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive. Write a letter to the post manager. In your letter Give details of the situation Describe the documents Say what action you want the post office to take.