The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000- 2010.

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shopes

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Calgery

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during a decade.

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Mari

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above 80000 $ in the year . There was a significant rise in 2001 and 2004 and it stood at roughly 100000$.

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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000- 2010.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Now a days, many people have to work longer hours, and they feel more stressed out than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their employees' lives easier?

In many countries crime rates among teenagers are higher than among other groups.What are the causes for this problem and what can be done to solve this?

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people Why might this be the cause? Do you think this is a positive or a negative situation?

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. *why might this be the case *Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some countries, owing a home rather than renting is very important. why might this be the case Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?