The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Though there are some contrasting voices, some people advocate that the development of mankind should be the prime goal of
science
. In my view, I completely agree with
this
view as it already brought a notion that without the help of it, we were unable to reach our desired destinations.
To begin
with, the advancement of
science
facilitates the invention of medicines and treatments for many diseases and makes lives longer and
healthy
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.
For example
, Black Fever took a lot of lives throughout the world over the
last
century, but the formulation and development of vaccines eradicated
this
serious illness.
Moreover
,
science
also
made communication very easy and convenient so that we can save valuable time and money.
while
the invention of the wheel gave humanity speed, the introduction of the steam engine and electricity
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the transportation system. Another point is that
science
helps to broaden our mentality and induce a concern over environmental damage. Since a lot of research
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proven that a good range of activities are exacerbating the planet's environment and suggested a way out from it, without the help of
science
it was not achievable.
Last
but not the list,
science
made agriculture and production easy taking not only the soil conditions into consideration but
also
the producing tools and other pesticides. In Madaripur,
for example
, a group of scientists developed compost fertilizer for the salt-infected soil to produce paddy and other crops. In conclusion, though few detrimental things had developed by
science
for the earth, we can say these were outweighed by the benefits it brought and it is expected that more positive aspects will be added in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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