Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that one’s success in life is mostly a matter of fortune. From my perspective, I do not totally agree with the statement
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the fact that a person’s achievements are not only based on luck but
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factors.
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following essay will discuss my point of view On the one hand, luck plays an integral role in one’s accomplishment.
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, fortune set up a concrete foundation.
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, people who
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wealthy family is able to access high-class education systems and
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sufficient healthcare service, creating
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conditions to achieve significant milestones.
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,
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class always have advantages in many disadvantageous situations.
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,
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persons always have superior opportunities to reach high status.
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, there are many other factors
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to a person’s career
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as dedication, persistence, determination and
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.
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situation can manifest itself through the fact that, Charlie Chaplin, a famous comedian in
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century, who born in poverty and lost his father at a very young age. In spite of extremely
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conditions, he
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struggled with challenges and became excessively successful in his midlife.
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, being successful can be true
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all if they make enough effort in their life. In conclusion,
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luck
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the luck
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factor
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there are a multiple
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other aspects
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to people’s accomplishments. Success requires more than that of being fortunate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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