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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart represents the proportion of international
tourists
 from four distinct sectors to
Australia
,
while
 the presented table provides information about the average length of stay, accommodation, and main activity of those international
visitors
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the pie chart that
tourists
 from Asia present the biggest number among the other categories.
According to
 the chart, the number of Asian
visitors
 who travel to
Australia
 accounts for 37%.
Furthermore
, there are just above a third of Europe
tourists
 visited
Australia
 at that time.
In addition
, the proportion of the US shows nearly a half compared to Asia,
while
 individuals from other regions display the least percentage among other regions, at only a tenth. From the table, the European
tourists
 display the longest stay in
Australia
, at 16 days,
while
, the shortest trip accounted for Asian
visitors
, at only a week. In terms of accommodation, European and other region people prefer to live in a camp or caravan during their trip to
Australia
.
On the other hand
, Asian and American
tourists
 choose to stay in a 5-star hotel and a 4-star hotel respectively.
In addition
, Sightseeing becomes the most popular activity of guests from Asia and America.
Moreover
,
while
 European
tourists
 love to swim/sunbathe in
Australia
,
visitors
 from other zones like to do surfing as a main activity.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, australia, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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