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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart represents the proportion of international
tourists
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 from four distinct sectors to
Australia
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,
while
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 the presented table provides information about the average length of stay, accommodation, and main activity of those international
visitors
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen from the pie chart that
tourists
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 from Asia present the biggest number among the other categories.
According to
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 the chart, the number of Asian
visitors
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 who travel to
Australia
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 accounts for 37%.
Furthermore
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, there are just above a third of Europe
tourists
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 visited
Australia
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 at that time.
In addition
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, the proportion of the US shows nearly a half compared to Asia,
while
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 individuals from other regions display the least percentage among other regions, at only a tenth. From the table, the European
tourists
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 display the longest stay in
Australia
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, at 16 days,
while
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, the shortest trip accounted for Asian
visitors
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, at only a week. In terms of accommodation, European and other region people prefer to live in a camp or caravan during their trip to
Australia
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.
On the other hand
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, Asian and American
tourists
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 choose to stay in a 5-star hotel and a 4-star hotel respectively.
In addition
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, Sightseeing becomes the most popular activity of guests from Asia and America.
Moreover
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,
while
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 European
tourists
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 love to swim/sunbathe in
Australia
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,
visitors
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 from other zones like to do surfing as a main activity.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, australia, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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