The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and prediction regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three countries.
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The table shows data about the
percentage
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of
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population
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the population
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aged 65 and above in
Canda
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Canada
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, Germany, and
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the
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UK from 1988 to 2030. It is evident that all 3
country
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countries
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will only
increase
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in
population
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aged 65 and older as the year goes by.
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, Germany
have
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the highest
percentage
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of 65 years old and above
population
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coming in at 20% and
UK
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the UK
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being
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is
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the lowest at 14% in 1988.
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, the
population
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percentage
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of 65+ years old
of
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in
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every country in the table will see an
increase
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in
percentage
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. With the data collected, we will be seeing an even more
increase
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in
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population
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the population
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that are 65 and above by 5% by 2030. Though, from 1988 to 2000 Uk have the lowest
increase
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in
65+
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the 65+
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years old
population
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at only
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a 1
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%
increase
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compare
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compared
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to Canada and Germany which increased
5
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by 5
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%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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