The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.

The chart shows the average life expectancy for males and females in 1900, 1950 and 1990.
The table below illustrates the average
life
expectancy
for males and females
of
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Austria
, Belgium, Denmark, Germany, and
Sweden
in 1900, 1950, and 1990. From the
data
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we can see that the average
life
expectancy
of both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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will increase as the year goes forward with females having the highest
life
expectancy
than males.
To begin
,
Austria
's
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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have the lowest
life
expectancy
in comparison with all the other countries in 1900 and 1950.
On the other hand
,
Austria
's men and women have the second highest average
life
expectancy
coming below
Sweden
at 73.5 years old for men and 80.4 for women.
In contrast
,
Sweden
have the highest average
life
expectancy
for both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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in 1900, 1950, and 1990.
However
,
Austria
's
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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have the highest increase in
life
span compared to
sweden
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but do not have
life
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a life
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span as high as
sweden
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.
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