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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201
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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of US people who ate at fast-food restaurants in 2003, 2006 and 2013 based on their frequencies.
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, it is noticeable that most people ate there either once a week or once or twice a month in those three years. For eating once every 7 days, it began at 31%
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 increased slightly to approximately 33% followed by a small decline to around 27%.
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, it was different to the category who ate once or twice a month. It stood at 30% in 2003 but dropped to 25% in 2006 followed by a significant rise to 33%. Eating several times weekly had the same trend as eating one time weekly. After increasing from 17% to 20%, there was a fall to 16% in 2013. Only 13% of people had a few times fast foods in 2003 and
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 rate increased to 15% in 2006. The number remained constant in 2013. The percentage for every day
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It seems that conjunction use may be incorrect here.

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never remained below 5% during
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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