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n the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#n #future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers
In recent years, the amount of workforce
have
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 been diminished to low levels because of the new technological achievement .Fortunately , the Transportation system
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 to
being
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auto- driver
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futurely
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future
 and nothing else the passengers will be inside it .
While
 many
people
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 that it is useful, others want to change
this
 notion . In my point of view ,
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 believe that
advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages . I will highlight to discuss both views below. On the one hand , having
self-drivers
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 cars
given
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 tremendous facilities and ease daily duties .
Initially
 , the main principle of
this
 invention is to combat
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car
accident
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 because it is programmed to pursue traffic rules and keep saving
people
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 life .
Secondly
 , the new generation became more lazy when they want to reach their selected destination.
for example
 ,
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 study
in
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cambridge
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 university has
been
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shown that 80
percent
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 of
people
 fall asleep in
long term
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 driving .
On the other hand
 , it is possible to make the opposing case . Drawbacks are numerous to
this
 ingenuity commencing with
reduction
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a reduction
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 in the employee number in the taxi companies ,which
result
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 in increasing job competition and
astonishing
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 amount of
people
 unemployed .
Consequently
 , it will have a huge impact on taking outdoor exercises and lack of human activities .
For instance
 ,
people
 can
used
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 their automated vehicles for purchasing
some
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food or drinks from the restaurant or supermarkets
instead
 of
burn
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 calories and
spend
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 strain to do that for themselves. In conclusion ,
,
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certainly
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 all ordinary transportation will vanish in the next decades . In my opinion , the merits overcome the demerits through a reduction in car collision , surviving
people
 from get asleep and performing their tasks quickly and smoothly .
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