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Do we have to plan for future or stay focused on our present what is your opinion and why ? provide example to support your stand.

It
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 often been said that everyone should have
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plan
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a plan
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 for
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future
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the future
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 to be
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a success
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success
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successful
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.
However
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, others think everything starts
from
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now. I partially agree and will deliberate both perspectives on
this
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 topic, adding my personal point of view
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 with,
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 psychologists, individuals cannot achieve success by putting focus on the activities which currently being done. Every person to reach their goals must
to
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put targets for the
future
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 which will be done step by step.
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, nowadays there
are
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is
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 enormous competition in
business
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the business
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 sphere and before
to open
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opening
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business
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a business
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 anybody will
plan
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 their startup or will analyze the competitors to get more profits.
Moreover
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,
people
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 who carefully
plan
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 their time management will be able to do more
task
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tasks
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 in their daily work.
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, individuals before to go any adventure,
they
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apply
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plan
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 their trip.
Usually
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,Usually
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 they take medicine, water and food because they do not know what they will face and they are trying to be ready
to
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for
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 any unhappy cases.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 should
to
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apply
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understand that it is not easily possible to get success just by looking for
the
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a
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future
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plan
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.
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,
people
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 cannot live
with
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without
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 saving money or something for the
future
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. It would not be sensible to invest all our hopes in a reality which may never happen.
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, a portion of
people
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 in Uzbekistan saves money
to
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for
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 their bad day
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while
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that
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 they can use
it
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apply
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to travel
other
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to other
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 worlds.
To conclude
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, in my
opinion
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people
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 should put their targets to the
future
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 and start it from now and they
also
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 should be ready that
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future
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the future
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 might disappoint them.

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