Some people today feel that physical money will no longer be used in the future. Others feel it will still have some uses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In many countries, online transactions are increasing rapidly. Even for buying small things, people are preferring online payment.
This
essay discusses why physical cash
will no longer be required in future and also
the issues involving online bill payments.
Firstly
, every person is using a smartphone nowadays, which led to using
multiple payment applicationsWrong verb form
the use of
widely
. There are many offers and cashback offered by these applications, which attracts major audiences to use these apps. Rephrase
apply
Secondly
, even groceries are delivered directly to our doorstep through online grocery apps. This
resulted in a major decline in physical currency. For example
, If we go to a small grocery store and we
purchase items in Correct pronoun usage
apply
cash
, the store owner lacks the physical money to give the change back because they are too
receiving most payments in Rephrase
also
cash
.
Nevertheless
, online transactions have their disadvantages. People are not realising that they are spending more money when they are using online transfers. There is an increase in scams where they are trying to hack a phone and get all the details of a person's identity and their account numbers. In terms of solutions, I believe the government should be largely responsible. For example
, there should be a limit of transactions per month. Money applications need to be properly certified by the government which would also
be beneficial. Naturally, individuals should also
try to address these problems. One way is to put pressure on the government to ensure they tackle the problems by forming awareness groups, especially for an elder
group of people which can help reduce the high levels of crime.
Replace the word
elderly
To conclude
, we need to have a balance in handling physical cash
and the bill we are transferring online.Submitted by avssrde on
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task response
Ensure that the introduction clearly states both sides of the argument and your opinion. Also provide a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points.
coherence
Work on structuring your paragraphs in a logical and coherent way. Use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas more effectively.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and effectively. Also, work on using more academic and formal language.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your use of grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure. Try to vary your sentence structures and use complex sentences where appropriate.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?