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The company you work has decided to close the cafeteria, as the staff is not using it much. You are not happy with the decision. Write a letter to the director Give reason of low usage How will it affect the staff Suggest ways to improve it

#company #work #cafeteria #staff #decision #director #reason #usage
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you about the situation
of
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in
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 our
cafetaria
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cafeteria
. I just noticed that our
cafeteria
 is going to be closed from next month on
notice
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the notice
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 board. Actually, The
prominant
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prominent
predominant
 reason behind
is
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this is
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 the service from the
cafeteria
 member is worst, and another thing is
the
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that
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 their dishes are really disgusting.
The cleaning
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is play
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a
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 essential thing in
kitchen
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the kitchen
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. so, some vital steps we need to take
for
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to
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 resolve the issue.
Moreover
, I would like to mention one thing in my letter that our
seniour programe
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senior programme
 manager Mr.
patel
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 was affected
from
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 the lunch, which was served by our cafe. He was ill and the report
show
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 that because of
unhygenic
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unhygienic
food
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food,
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 he was sick.
Therefore
, our staff members are less likely to visit our
cafeteria
. I
really
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 disappointed because of
this
 and only
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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 is the place, where we can
spent
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 more time with each other. If the staff of
cafeteria
 will change and some steps regard to
hygenic
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hygienic
 would
be consider
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,
then
 we can make a better environment for kitchen. and our staff would like to use the
cafeteria
instead
from
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 their personal cabin.
As a
result
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 we would be able to clean our office area as well. Hope you consider
the
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my opinion about the concern.
your
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Yours
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 faithfully Dhrumilkumar
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Patel
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patel
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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