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In some countries, using internet in schools is getting more popular. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Introduction
Now a days
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internet
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 is value able thing for
the
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every one
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everyone
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Although
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childern
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children
 even old
persen
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person
 do not live
with out
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without
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internet
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is
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using
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 in school is getting popular
that is
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right
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a right
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 thing it,s really popular in schools or
every where
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everywhere
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.
That
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 the question is
right
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the right
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 thing or not .
Body paragraph 1
Moreever
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Moreover
,
some time
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sometimes
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 it is positive or
some time
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sometimes
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nagative
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negative
 because when
childern
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children
 use
for
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it for
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 study it is positive but the otherhsnd when they take
for
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it for
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vidio
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video
game
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games
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,
youtub
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youtube
 or other things it is
nagative
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negative
.
Body paragraph 2
In
school
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 children are
totaly
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totally
depending
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dependent
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 on.
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internet
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the internet
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 some children have
atraction
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attraction
of
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to
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the phone
a phone
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phone
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phones
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 like that things .
That is
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a harlous
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harlous
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hilarious
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childrn
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children
.
Conclusion
In
advance
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advanced
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the coutry
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coutry
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country
 or
richest
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the richest
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 parents
usully
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usually
 look
in
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at
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school
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schools
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 that have modern things like
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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etc.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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