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A magazine wants to include contribution from its readers for an article called 'the book that influenced me most". Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influences you most. In your letter, •describe what this book was about, •explain how this book influenced you, •say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Sir/Madam. I am writing
this
 missive to inform you about the article "The
book
 that influenced me most". I read
this
 whole article and it is all about how to tackle negativity in your life
as well as
 it gives many positive ideas about
the
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hard situations and
it's
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it
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help
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 out you to come out from
the
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depression. I want to let you know that I was in
the
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a
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 depression
since
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 a long time
due to
 my work issues but my father suggest me
this
book
 and I started reading
this
 booklet.
Moreover
, it gets me totally positive vibes. When I felt anxiety and depression, I think about
this
book
 and it suddenly gives me good vibration.
Thus
, help me out regarding
to
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my mental health.
Furthermore
, I suggest
this
book
my
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 many friends who are
drepress
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depressed
depress
 related to their activities and want to come out
form
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this
.
In addition
, I must say
this
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 books help out
lot
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a lot
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 of people in their life.
This
book
 is
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a lifesavier
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lifesavier
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lifesaver
 for each and every
individuals
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 who have negative thoughts in their minds. I eagerly waited for
this
 kind of other
books
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 from your side. Yours Sincerely, Zuben Notiyal.
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