Many people in poor countries die from diseases that are curable because they cannot afford the medication required. Do you believe that drug companies should make their products available at reduced prices in these countries?

In poor
countries
, many
people
suffer from diseases
that
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easy to treat in rich
countries
.
Also
,
People
in poor
countries
cannot afford medicines and medical treatments if they need
ones
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them
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. So, some
people
believe that
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drug companies should reduce
price
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for them or give them
as
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free. In my opinion,
this
idea has advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand,
people
who can afford medicines but still struggle to pay may complain about the gap between poor
people
and them.
For example
, there are some
people
who have to rent money to purchase tablets in rich
countries
and they have to pay back money they cannot afford.
Moreover
, it might be difficult to decide who gets
discount
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and who doesn't. As I mentioned, there are
people
who can't pay at all and can pay little.
Therefore
, it would be complicated for the drug companies to choose
who
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to apply.
On the other hand
, some
people
insist that poor
people
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to get
right
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treatment as everyone deserves.
People
can't ignore poor
people
to die
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because of money so it is natural for them to get
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.
For instance
, even though it was easy to cure, there are a lot of
people
who suffer and pass away from diseases in poor
country
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countries
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. So, we have to help them to survive and give them
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to live equally.
Furthermore
,
this
problem solving
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could help
countries
which have a small birth rate. One of the
reason
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is that poor
countries
often have many children,
however
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they die young. And if rich
countries
with little birth
rate
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donate them
required
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medical treatment, children may help the problem of
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in those
countries
in the future. In conclusion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. In my opinion,
people
should have the same opportunity and chances to live.
The drug
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companies have to make
a
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right
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to get
discount
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discounts
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and save
people
's lives.
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  • Pharmaceuticals
  • Generic drugs
  • Patent laws
  • Healthcare disparity
  • Subsidies
  • Non-Governmental Organizations (NGOs)
  • Intellectual property
  • Epidemiology
  • Affordability
  • Global health initiatives
  • Corporate social responsibility
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