With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threanted to the point of extenction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with the problem.

The bar chart shows the
percentenge
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percentage
of weekly income used by the family in one country in the
year
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years
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1968 and 2018.
Overall
the highest
presentege
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percentage
is on
food
in 1968 and most on
leisure
time in the year 2018.The others like
food
,fuel and power,clothing and
footware
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footwear
and personal
good
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show a positive state
while
housing,transport and
leisure
coming
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a rise and the
remaing catagory
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remaining category
stayed still. In 1968,the family sums on
food
takes highest about 35%,
while
housing,clothing and
footware
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footwear
took on 10%,others like household and personal
good
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goods
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,transport and
leisure
are the same (about 8%).
In contrast
, the weekly
on
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fuel and power income was no
troulbe
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trouble
for them at 3%. In 2018,the family have
change
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their lifestyle as they cut down
food
spending
at
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18% ,upgrade their housing to 19% , spend on their
leisure
by 22%,costing transportation up to 14%,
household
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and household
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goods stay unchanged,Which came to a result that fuel and power,personal goods,clothing and
footware
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footwear
have
skewwerd
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skewered
skewers
skewed
down about 5%. In conclusion,we see how time has changed from a family spending on mostly
food
to nowadays living a
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balance
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life with no problems facing them
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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