the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits

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The chart illustrates percentages of city residents who were buying

coffee

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such

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as fresh or instant tea or were buying in

cafe

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cafes

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in five

cities

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in Australia including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in the

last

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four weeks.

Overall

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, the least amount of people in five

cities

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, are who bought fresh

coffee

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While

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the highest average in all

cities

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except in Adelaide with little difference (nearly 1%), are who went to a cafe for tea or

coffee

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. In terms of ,

cities

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one

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of them was not the same. The number of Cofe fans was middle of the quantity of anyone else.

According to

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,Sydney the population of fresh and instant

coffee

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eaters

were

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was

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almost the same, in other ,words they were around 45%. ,

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the most percentage that

experienced

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was experienced

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among all

cities

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was in Melbourne with about 64% of people who drank

coffee

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and tea in

coffee

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Not to mention

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that

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apply

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Brisbane has a minimum of everyone who drank fresh

coffee

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(nearly 35%)

while

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apply

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in Adelaide people were like them. Australian residents who bought instant

coffee

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in Hobart were popular,

that is

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means that

was

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apply

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about 55%.

Submitted by y.maryam.2004 on Wed Jul 05 2023

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

189 words

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