the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits
The chart illustrates percentages of city residents who were buying
coffee
such
as fresh or instant tea or were buying in cafe
in five Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
cities
in Australia including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in the last
four weeks.
Overall
, the least amount of people in five cities
, are who bought fresh coffee
. While
the highest average in all cities
except in Adelaide with little difference (nearly 1%), are who went to a cafe for tea or coffee
. In terms of ,cities
on
of them was not the same. The number of Cofe fans was middle of the quantity of anyone else.
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According to
,Sydney the population of fresh and instant coffee
eaters were
almost the same, in other ,words they were around 45%. ,Correct subject-verb agreement
was
Also
the most percentage that experienced
among all Add a missing verb
was experienced
cities
was in Melbourne with about 64% of people who drank coffee
and tea in coffee
. Not to mention
that in
Brisbane has a minimum of everyone who drank fresh Change preposition
apply
coffee
(nearly 35%) while
,
in Adelaide people were like them. Australian residents who bought instant Remove the comma
apply
coffee
in Hobart were popular, that is
means that was
about 55%.Unnecessary verb
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