the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits

the chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee nd tea buying and drinking habits
The chart illustrates percentages of city residents who were buying
coffee
such
as fresh or instant tea or were buying in
cafe
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in five
cities
in Australia including Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart in the
last
four weeks.
Overall
, the least amount of people in five
cities
, are who bought fresh
coffee
.
While
the highest average in all
cities
except in Adelaide with little difference (nearly 1%), are who went to a cafe for tea or
coffee
. In terms of ,
cities
on
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of them was not the same. The number of Cofe fans was middle of the quantity of anyone else.
According to
,Sydney the population of fresh and instant
coffee
eaters
were
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almost the same, in other ,words they were around 45%. ,
Also
the most percentage that
experienced
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among all
cities
was in Melbourne with about 64% of people who drank
coffee
and tea in
coffee
.
Not to mention
that
in
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Brisbane has a minimum of everyone who drank fresh
coffee
(nearly 35%)
while
,
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in Adelaide people were like them. Australian residents who bought instant
coffee
in Hobart were popular,
that is
means that
was
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about 55%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • percentage
  • frequency
  • preference
  • health benefits
  • caffeine content
  • cultural significance
  • consumption
  • trends
  • venues
  • social aspects
  • beverage
  • shift
  • influence
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • discussion
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