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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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It is claimed that people should adapt to global warming
instead
 of attempting to prevent its effects. From my point of view, I strongly disagree with
this
 view because I believe it is not too late for us to tackle
this
 problem. On the one hand, there are a number of several reasons why trying to live with
climate
change
 could lead to serious consequences. The foremost
causes
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 is that when people accept to live with
climate
 control, they will face
lack
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 of clear water and disease.
For example
, there have been bushfires that destroyed a large land of Australia and killed thousands of animals
that
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which
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 greatly affected the lives of the residents there.
In addition
,
due to
climate
change
, the intensity of the heat is high, directly affecting human health.
Therefore
, accepting and living with it is not a good idea.
On the other hand
, compared to adaptation, preventing global warming should be given more attention because of its long-term effects.
Firstly
, the government should encourage people to use public transport
instead
 of private vehicles.
This
 will reduce vehicle emissions into the environment.
As a result
, the amount of carbon will decrease, greatly contributing to the reduction of global warming.
Moreover
, a typical
prevent
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 is community campaigns. By educating the younger generation about
climate
change
 and the importance of protecting the Earth from an early age, we can promote an eco-friendly lifestyle that includes saving energy and reducing emissions. In conclusion, I suppose that fighting
climate
change
 is much more important than just finding ways to live with it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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