Some people spend money on sport and cultural event. Do you think this is good or bad?
Am
activity involving physical exertion and skill in which an individual or team competes against another or others for entertainment Correct your spelling
An
is terms
as sport whiles Change the verb form
is termed
is terming
culture
is the way and life of people and cultural events
are activities that brings
two or more families together which educate individuals on how to Change the verb form
bring
culture
practices are being made therefore
I think when people spend more money
on cultural events
is good whiles sports is also
a form of exercise which helps individuals to maintain good health and keep their health condition good therefore
spending more money
on sports it also
good and helps improves the wellbeing of an individual.i
will personally like to spend more Change the capitalization
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money
on cultural activities so I get to know how culture
is been made how
it came up and understand the way and act of our daily lives thereby Correct word choice
and how
and
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apply
also
culture
Replace the word
cultural
events
helps
bring up families together which creates more existing relationships and bond between families and friends .Change the verb form
help
Finally
I believe spending Add a comma
,Finally
money
on both cultures
Replace the word
cultural
events
and sports are all good and a form of recreational activity which helps keeps our health in a good state .Submitted by dede on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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- thirdly
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- moreover
- also
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- for instance
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- however
- although
- even though
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