Some people spend money on sport and cultural event. Do you think this is good or bad?

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activity involving physical exertion and skill in which an individual or team competes against another or others for entertainment
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as sport whiles
culture
is the way and life of people and cultural
events
are activities that
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two or more families together which educate individuals on how to
culture
practices are being made
therefore
I think when people spend more
money
on cultural
events
is good whiles sports is
also
a form of exercise which helps individuals to maintain good health and keep their health condition good
therefore
spending more
money
on sports it
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good and helps improves the wellbeing of an individual.
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will personally like to spend more
money
on cultural activities so I get to know how
culture
is been made
how
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and how
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it came up and understand the way and act of our daily lives thereby
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apply
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also
culture
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events
helps
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bring up families together which creates more existing relationships and bond between families and friends .
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I believe spending
money
on both
cultures
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events
and sports are all good and a form of recreational activity which helps keeps our health in a good state .
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