The chart below show the changes in ownership of eletrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below show the changes in ownership of eletrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs below indicate the changes in
households
with electrical appliances and
amount
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the amount
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of
time
spent on
houseworks
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housework
from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
it is clear that
there were significant changes in all factors over the
period
including a rapid increase in
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the refigerator
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refigerator
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refrigerator
. In the meantime, the number of hours spent on
houseworks
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housework
such
as
wahing
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washing
clothes,
prepraring
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preparing
mealsand
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meals and
cleaning
was
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considerably decreased during the same
time
period
.
According to
the first graph, none of
households
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the households
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had a fridge in 1920, but the rate dramatically went up to 90% in 1960 and
then
all
households
had
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had one from 1980. Compare to the fridge, the proportion of
households
with
the
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a
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vacumm
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vacuum
cleaner and washing machine
were
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was
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30% and 40% respectively in 1920. Since
then
, the rate of both items increased to 70%. After that, one for
vacumm
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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went up to 100% in 2000,
while
the growth of washing
machine
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machines
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turned slow during the same
time
period
. In terms of housework
time
from the second graph, 50 hours per week were spent in 1920. After that, the amount of
time
on
houseworks
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housework
rapidly decreased over the
period
, only 10 hours per week were spent on it in 2019. Looking at the two graphs more closely, when the rate of
households
with
fridge
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fridges
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went up, the
time
spent on
houseworks
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housework
declined proportionately. One can see that
households
were spending a lot of
time
on
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apply
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preparing meals among all
houseworks
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housework
,
the
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and the
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introduction of
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the refigerator
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refigerator
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refrigerator
lessened the
time
on it.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, time, houseworks, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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