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some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. others,however, think that change is always a good thing. discuss both views and give ur opinion

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 ,me variation is good but sometimes time doing the same equipment is good. an adjustment has two sides good and bad in some ways doing the same junk has both sides good and bad. As some
family
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 are changing
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 today's space is good for both the older generation and a new generation. week makes community diversity. It is said that nations that revise as needed time
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are always benefited and
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 who do not
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 over occasion will face difficulty. A person will accept the transformation and develop to according
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 good for the person and the public. In olden times society use to work on key paid mobile but now folk are using smartphones smartphone which is a good chance
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 types of revolution are good. There are communities who think that adjustments and updates are not needed and
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 population will not transform and will do the same things. If a person will avoid modification
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 it will be a loss for the population and
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 body. As many public do not accept innovation it has a good side sometimes moment. It is a good thing that folk are avoiding bad development.
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 should always avoid bad adjustments so it can not lead to bad changes
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 reactions. There are societies that do not modify which makes a community's old generation alive and helps others to learn stuff. So changes are good but they should be made
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 age. Doing the same stuff have benefits and disadvantage but if a body works and make changes
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 age have a positive side. revolution should be made according so it does not create side effects. improvement is good but not needed all the time.
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