Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today's world subjects like Science and technology are more important than History. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

A number of people believe that
history
is
the
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vital
subject
in
curriculum
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.
While
,
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other people
indicates
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indicate
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that
with
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in
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todays
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today's
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world
that
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apply
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subjects
like
science
and
technology
are more critical than
history
. Both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand ,
history
is saying as an important
subject
by
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many people.
In other words
, the learning of
history
could bring some benefits.
As a result
,
adolescent
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adolescents
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will get to know about
ancestors
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their ancestors
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and their livelihood.
Moreover
, youth learn about past
nation
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nations
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,
how
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and how
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they have lived and
brought
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were brought
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up.
However
, by getting
know
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they know how to live their life perfectly. To
illustrates
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,
to encounter
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future
problems can be reduced by getting
know
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to know
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the
history
.
On the other hand
,
subjects
like
science
and
technology
are
vital
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more vital
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than other
subjects
.
For example
, learning about
science
and
medical related
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medical-related
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subjects
will be useful in
future
. Unlike in the past , new
dieseces
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diseases
are being created
everyday
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.
In addition
, to adopt these we should give
importance
to
science
subject
. On top of that ,
technology
has been
a
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essential
subject
, as
enhancement
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the enhancement
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of
future
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the future
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is growing.
Moreover
, folks are giving
importance
for
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to
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technology
is
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to encounter
future
circumstances.
That is
to say , nowadays ,
science
and
technology
subject
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subjects
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should be given
importance
in
curriculum
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is vital. To summarize ,
although
history
taught the past ancestor’s evolution
but
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the advancement of
future
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the future
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is growing , I strongly agree with
this
notion , giving
importance
to
science
and
technology
is
vital
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more vital
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,
than
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then
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giving
importance
to
History
.
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  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
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  • advancements
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