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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows the data for the foreign visitor who visit 3 different
areas
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 in
Europe
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 between
the
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1987 to 2007.
According to
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 the data given to us by the graph ,it can be seen that there are 3 main places visited by these non-European visitors which are the coastal
areas
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 , the mountains and the
lakes
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 . Between the years 1987 to
1997
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,1997
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 the most visited
areas
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 of
Europe
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 by oversea tourists were the coast ,the
lakes
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 and the mountains
area
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 respectively . But in the years 1997 and 2002 , the statistic of
people
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 who visited the
lakes
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 overtake the most visited place in
Europe
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 from the coastal
area
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 .The number of
people
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 visiting the
lakes
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area
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 peaked at
estimately
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estimated
estimate
 around 75
thousand
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people
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 in the year 2002 ,before delined down to around 50
thousand
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people
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 in the year 2007. Meanwhile ,the visitor figure in the mountain
areas
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 of
Europe
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 stagnant only increased by around 10
thousand
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people
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 between 1987 and 2007 .
In contrast
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 , the number of travellers who visited the coastal
area
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 in the same period increased by around 30
thousand
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people
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 and 40
thousand
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people
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 for the lake
area
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 visitor number .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words areas, europe, lakes, area, people, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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