Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Serious social problems can appear to the surface when move to a new place that
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talk a foreign
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practical problems. In my perspective, I totally agree in
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that. Fully understanding, what people talking about, can help to deliver our own opinion
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not understand the topic has
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condition to express
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. International students,
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if they want to reach a good grade.
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, Not only are learning in university, but
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with local people when
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something like
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which can lead to
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higher price if they cannot deal with
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tongue.
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, an individual who cannot interact in
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leads to detrimental effects.
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Health Organization (2023), the main mental disaster of moving
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a new place is coming from
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, causing less
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and isolation. These are the first
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which
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performance in
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or university.
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, adjusting in speech is
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skill that can diminish the negative effects and
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learning the
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before going abroad is the best preparation.
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,
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in every environment. I believe
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this
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is a reason of regulation why each individual has had basic qualified in speech before going abroad.
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Your essay does not fully address the prompt as it leans only towards agreement without examining counterarguments or the extent of agreement, leading to a limited task response.
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Points made in the essay are somewhat repetitive and not clearly developed. You should aim to expand upon your ideas and present varied reasons or examples to support your argument.
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The use of specific examples is limited and not particularly effective in illustrating your points. Try referencing more detailed and relevant instances or studies to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an identifiable structure, but transitions between points can be smoother, and the logical flow can be improved by consistently connecting ideas from sentence to sentence.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they could be enhanced to more effectively preview and summarize the main points of the essay.
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You should focus on supporting your main points more effectively by clearly explaining how they relate to the topic and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear central idea.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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