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The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types. Summarize the information and make comparison.

The diagram shows how tea leaves are processed into five tea types. Summarize the information and make comparison.
This
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 provided diagram illustrates the manufacture of different five kinds of
tea
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Overall
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, it can be seen that all the teas are produced from the same leaves and different stages of preparation that produce various five brands of
tea
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Firstly
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, the initial three steps of manufacturing are the same for all the teas, the leaves are grown and
then
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 plucked, and after that, they should be withered.
Also
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, the final stage which is the drying process must be carried out for each
tea
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 in an oven.
In addition
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 to that, white
tea
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 is unique, as; it does not have any other processing.
Furthermore
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, green
tea
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, oolong
tea
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, and large-leaf black
tea
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 must be rolled, but only green
tea
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 should be steamed before the rolling process.
Then
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, oolong
tea
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, large-leaf black
tea
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, and small-leaf black
tea
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 should be fermented, the fermentation s slight for oolong
tea
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 and full for the other two types.
Moreover
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, small-leaf black
tea
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 is the only one, which is crushed before the complete fermentation.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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