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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement.

#country #language
In
this
 era,
people
 from different parts of the world are migrating to foreign countries for studies or for business issues.
Although
 some
people
 argue that you can face social and practical problems of residing
in
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overseas where you need to speak their mother
language
,it could be tackled with practising and continuous learning of
this
.
Firstly
,someone may encounter
the
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language
 barrier provided that every country has its mother tongue.As an illustration,in Japan,
people
 from there use
Japanese
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language
 as a main
language
 in all aspects of fields.
Hence
,one would be troublesome in his or her daily life
such
 as transportation,buying food from vendors and local dwellers,seeking medical and social help,etc.
Moreover
,it would be challenging for employees
getting
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 their jobs because of the
language
 limitation.Another drawback is that someone can be inconvenient in expanding the social circle thereby creating new friends and socialising with local citizens.
As a result
,
lack
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 of friendship would lead to loneliness
as well as
 depression . Despite the fact that it is demanding for living in a foreign country,the problems can be solved by continuous learning and practising even if you are not
initially
 fluent in that
language
.
People
 can practise daily usage
words
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of words
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 with their colleagues and friends and
also
 can learn through various
kind
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 of social platforms.In terms of the national level,the government should provide
language
 programs for immigrants so that they can promote their cultural habitats and customs.
To sum up
,in my opinion,when
people
 living in a foreign country have to use a different
language
 , some communication issues and misunderstandings might
be occurred
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.
However
,if you never give up and keep Learning and
practicing
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,you will overcome and solve these problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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