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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement.

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In
this
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 era,
people
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 from different parts of the world are migrating to foreign countries for studies or for business issues.
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 some
people
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 argue that you can face social and practical problems of residing
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overseas where you need to speak their mother
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,it could be tackled with practising and continuous learning of
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.
Firstly
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,someone may encounter
the
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language
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 barrier provided that every country has its mother tongue.As an illustration,in Japan,
people
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 from there use
Japanese
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the Japanese
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language
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 as a main
language
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 in all aspects of fields.
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,one would be troublesome in his or her daily life
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 as transportation,buying food from vendors and local dwellers,seeking medical and social help,etc.
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,it would be challenging for employees
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 their jobs because of the
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 limitation.Another drawback is that someone can be inconvenient in expanding the social circle thereby creating new friends and socialising with local citizens.
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,
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 of friendship would lead to loneliness
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 depression . Despite the fact that it is demanding for living in a foreign country,the problems can be solved by continuous learning and practising even if you are not
initially
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 fluent in that
language
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.
People
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 can practise daily usage
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 with their colleagues and friends and
also
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 can learn through various
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 of social platforms.In terms of the national level,the government should provide
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 programs for immigrants so that they can promote their cultural habitats and customs.
To sum up
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,in my opinion,when
people
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 living in a foreign country have to use a different
language
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 , some communication issues and misunderstandings might
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.
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,if you never give up and keep Learning and
practicing
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,you will overcome and solve these problems
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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