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The charts show where people get their news and how much they trust these sources.

The charts show where people get their news and how much they trust these sources.
The chart illustrates, how
people
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 in countries get their
news
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 and believe in those
sources
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.
overall
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, among the 12 countries in the chart, Finland shows more acceptance of
news
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 and
sources
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 and
people
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 in the united states shows only a little
trust
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 in their information and the source.
To begin
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 with, individuals in Finland show 65%
trust
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 in their
news
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 and
sources
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. Countries like Brazil and Nigeria have equal acceptance in the above case,
that is
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 54%. In the case of Germany, There is a 1% decrease when compared with Brazil and Nigeria,
that is
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 53%.
In addition
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 to
this
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 Canada, Japan and Turkey have almost the same proportion of
trust
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 in their
news
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 and
sources
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. Human begins in Canada show 45 %, 42% in Japan and 41% in Turkey. To add on, 38% of Indian
people
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 accept their
news
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 and
sources
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.
Although
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, Spain and the United Kingdom have the same proportion in
this
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 case. Both have 36%.
People
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 in France show 30%
trust
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 in their
news
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 and
sources
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.
Last
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 but not least
United
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the United
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 States, only 29% of
people
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 believe their
news
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 and
sources
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, news, sources, trust with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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