Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

The world has been a global village and by that
mean
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any
communications
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amongst the nations in terms of anything has been the easiest of all time nowadays. People across the world including the higher delegates of the
country
can be in touch very easily than in the past. It would be a great help by
richest
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countries
to the one who is not doing well and is need of some help by providing funds or donations to contribute to food for those who can not earn daily bread and providing education to the aspirants of the
countries
after thorough evaluation as to ensure justifiable distribution of donations received.
To begin
with, developed and financially sound
countries
can render help to the poorer
countries
with money or
by
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donations to ensure unable can have food.
Also
, there are many students in the
country
who are bright but step back
due to
not
able
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to afford
the
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further
education. If
donation
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received can be utilised behind them, they could be one day an asset
of
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the
country
. Apart from all these, rich
countries
can set up certain projects of them to ensure employment after
thorough
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agreement and locals can get jobs.
Furthermore
, it is poorer
countries
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countries'
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primarily
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responsibility to look after their nation. They must have some rules that would benefit the citizens of the nations and
do
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not become cumbersome to manage the resources available.
For example
, it would be
wise
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decision to not let waste any benefits they are providing to people. And, those who are needy to be provided.
Moreover
, being watchful
at
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corruption can help alleviate many problems. It could be done by being role
model
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at their level and
ensure
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that people are working toward
betterment
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the betterment
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of
nation
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the nation
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.
To conclude
,
together with
the help of rich
countries
and making sure it's genuine utilisation and leading the nations setting proper agendas for citizens and emphasizing on
countries
education of youth can lift
country
gradually to the other level.
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