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What are the advantages and disadvantages of living in a large city?

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The subject of
this
 essay is whether it is better to live in a big town or not. Some people assert that megapolis is the best place to live,
whereas
 many others argue that living in the countryside has more benefits. So, let's take a look at
this
 issue from different perspectives. On the one hand, living in
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 large city has many clear advantages. The first thing that stands out in my mind is
variety
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a variety
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 of opportunities in every part of life, that are career, hobbies, education, health and so on.
Also
, there is a huge amount of activities taking
places
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everyday
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,
that
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 is why it is really hard to get bored.
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, only
this
 week more
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 fifty different events
has
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 been opened in Moscow.
On the other hand
, some people
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 another point of view and claim there
is
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 more
disadvanatages
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disadvantages
disadvantaged
at
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 living in a mega city. First and foremost they are talking about
ecological
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the ecological
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 situation. The quality of water and, especially,
air
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 is much
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higher in the countryside, compare to the urban, for which we can find plenty of evidence from our own experience.
Furthermore
, the level of noise can be highlighted.
For instance
, it is almost impossible to sleep in Moscow with open windows, which is quite
inconvinient
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inconvenient
convenient
 in summer. In conclusion, I would agree that life in a megapolis has its own benefits and drawbacks. If you asked me, I would prefer to live in
central
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 city with the opportunity to go away to some quiet place on the weekends.
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