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Reasons why people travel to work by eigher car or bike

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The two pie charts display the key reasons why
people
 choose either cycle or drive to work by percentage. The largest proportion of
people
 who cycle
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 made
this
 choice for health and environmental reasons whilst the prime advantage of driving to work is considered to be the comfort of travelling by car. Notably, for an almost equal proportion of
people
, their chosen method is the fastest. Taken together, health and fitness and less pollution are reasons given by over half of the
people
 who prefer travelling by bike. Each represents a 30% portion which is double the next most popular reason which is the lack of parking issues at 15%. A different set of concerns have affected the decision of those who choose to commute by car. Comfort is by far the most significant factor
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 40% of
people
, but
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 to work is a more important concern for just over a fifth of drivers. For 14% of
people
, a faster journey time is the key factor compared to a figure of 12% of cyclists who find their means of transport quicker.
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