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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. To what extent you agree or disagree?

#prison #punishment #criminals
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Sending people who commit a
crime
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 to jail is one of the ways to punish them and, after punishment, return them to
society
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.
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, I believe that it is not the number solution to tackle
crime
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 or educate
criminals
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 in order to avoid wrongdoings. I think that some
criminals
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 should be forgiven or fined
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 of being sentenced.
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 is because they might have committed a
crime
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 by accident or committed a murder not on purpose. Sending
criminals
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 to jail is one of the effective ways to keep
society
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 safe.
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 is because if the person is a serial killer, who murdered many people should be imprisoned for his or her actions. By doing so, government and individuals can benefit it from.
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, if we let the serious offender walk in the streets and kill people to gain power or money.
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 action could cause life threats to the citizens in
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 area. There is another way to rehabilitate
criminals
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 is to fine them or give them a second chance not to send them to prison immediately.
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 means paying a fine to the government to cover the bills can be a life-changing decision for the person who might have not committed a
crime
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 unintentionally. Another way is giving a great amount of community work that can give a sense of belongings to the person who can feel themselves a part of the community. It helps them to return to
society
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 in order to lead a normal life. In conclusion, sending the law-breakers to jail can be one of the solutions to the problem but they should be given another chance to live in
society
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 normally by making them pay a fine or do some community work. I do think that both ways of punishing
criminals
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 ought to be taken into consideration.
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