the graph below show top ten countries vehicle cost.

the graph below show top ten countries vehicle cost.
The graph compares the GDP per capita,
cost
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of a Toyota Camry and
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length of time it takes for 1 citizen to purchase that mode of transport in eight Asian countries. Despite having the second lowest average yearly income, it costs more to buy
this
car in Vietnam than in all but one other Asian nation. It
also
takes significantly longer for a standard person to buy an automobile in Vietnam than in any other state in Asia. On the other end of the scale, Singaporeans have to pay nearly three times more for their cars than the Vietnamese and it takes them the least amount of time to afford a motor vehicle. It costs $49,944 to buy a Toyota Camry in Vietnam, but
this
dwarfs the average yearly income per person at just $1,910. It would
therefore
take a normal man or woman 26.1 years to save up for that particular car.
This
is
in contrast
to Singapore where it costs $126,245 for that model of
motorcar
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,
however
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the average salary is much greater at $55,182.
This
means that it generally takes just over 2 years for a typical individual from Singapore to acquire
this
vehicle.
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