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The charts below show the different forms in which fish were sold in 1950 and 1985. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts illustrate the percentage that sold out of
fish
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 in
variety
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various
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 forms in percentage between 1950 and 1985.
Overall
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, the fresh
fish
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 in the earlier year was the highest rate and frozen
fish
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 shows the lowest levels
from
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of
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 all items.
While
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,
at the end
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 of the year, animal
food
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 was the biggest proportion rather than animal
food
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 and frozen
fish
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 was the smallest portion. As a graph shows, in the year
of
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apply
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1950, the amount of
fish
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 that
sold
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was sold
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 was 21,000,000 tons. New
fish
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 was the greatest percentage that stood at 50%. The animal snack was about 10%
that
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which
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 was the rate
who
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that
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 stood in the middle of all items
who
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that
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 sold. Unfortunately, frozen
fish
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 experienced almost no sales at 1%.
On the other hand
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, in 1985 the number of
food
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 sold was 76,000,000 tons. Animal
food
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 was the highest, which was about 32%.
In addition
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, cured
fish
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 and frozen
fish
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 stood at 13% which is equal to sold.
However
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, it shows the lowest percentages of all criteria of
fish
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 were sold out at the time.
Therefore
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, there are different terms of sales the
fish
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 in each period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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