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The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar graph illustrates, information about the number of prisoners in Great Britain, Australia, New
Zealand
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, the United States and
Canada
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 from the year 1930 to 1980.
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, it is noticeable that the United States has the maximum amount of
people
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 in custody from 1940 to 1980.
In contrast
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, the United Kingdom has the minimum amount of captivity. In 1930,
Canada
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 has the highest range of
people
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 to be in jail, with a rate of approximately 120.
Whereas
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 New
Zealand
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 and the US have an equal amount of 100 and Australia's count was 70. In
this
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 year
Canada
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 has the least value as 30. From 1940 to 1960, all countries' growth were fluctuating but ,still the US
people
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 in jail rate was above 100. By 1970, Great Britain, Australia and New
Zealand
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's figures became stable at 68 digits
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 the US and
Canada
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 have a drastic reduction to 90 and 85. By the end of 1980, the US custody rate has peaked at 130 and was in a leading position.
On the other hand
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,
Canada
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, Great Britain and New
Zealand
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 hold similar numbers
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 as 89, 82 and 85.
Canada
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 has the least count of
people
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 to be in incarceration with 50.
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